The Saint, The Lover and The Devil

Posted: December 24th, 2010 | Author: | Filed under: Short Stories | Tags: | 11 Comments »

(This flash fiction is part of my friend, Loren Eaton’s, shared storytelling holiday venture, Advent Ghosts.  Other stories can be found on his blog, I Saw Lightning Fall.  Naturally, I set it to music… so click the Youtube link first).

She was asleep.  He awoke suddenly, rested, dressed, cleaned and ready.

Propelled into his sleigh, the reindeer thrust forward as he desperately checked: 12:02 am, 2001.  Two minutes were lost.

He circumvented the world in four hours, thirty-one minutes. He should have been faster.  But the world kept changing.  Deliberately slowing him.

The elves brought her.  She woke at his final delivery and they spent his two waking hours alone together.  She would not sleep again until midnight, December 24, 2002.  He would not wake again until the same time.

But such were the villain’s terms for the lovers’ immortality.


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11 Comments on “The Saint, The Lover and The Devil”

  1. 1 Michelle Davidson Argyle said at 6:55 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Oh, I love this! A desperately sad love story intertwined in the midst, and hinting at a wicked subplot. Very nice. :)

  2. 2 Aidan Fritz said at 8:39 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Sweetly touching and sad. The music you included to go along with it creates a mournful ambience that goes along with the piece.

  3. 3 Phil W said at 9:17 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Curious–what an idea. Thanks for the story. I was confused at the opening, but I understood by the end.

  4. 4 Tony Chavira said at 10:04 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Ha, glad you stuck around until the end then… thanks Phil!

  5. 5 Tony Chavira said at 10:06 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Glad you liked the music, Aidan. I actually listening to this album, Insen (Live), often when I write. I highly recommend it.

  6. 6 Tony Chavira said at 10:08 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Thanks Michelle! I’m glad putting “the Devil” in the title didn’t make the whole thing too obvious or forward, haha.

  7. 7 C. N. Nevets said at 11:43 am on December 24th, 2010:

    Creepy Christmas, Greek-tragedy style. Very nicely done. Good job with the tension in such a short space.

  8. 8 S.D. Smith said at 4:41 pm on December 24th, 2010:

    Fascinating. I loved the music.

  9. 9 Loren Eaton said at 5:22 pm on December 24th, 2010:

    The music really adds a nice touch to this, Tony. Subtle, poignant and haunting. Very well done.

  10. 10 Donna Hole said at 6:28 pm on December 24th, 2010:

    Sad but beautiful. Reminds me of the ending to Pirates of the Carribean 3. This is romantic in its own way.

    ……..dhole

  11. 11 yvonne osborne said at 5:39 am on December 28th, 2010:

    Excellent short! And such a clever but sad twist to Santa’s feat. Very good.

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